Okay,before I post this,I'm warning you,since I'm a n00b here,almost nobody here will read it,and it's (through my eyes) Pretty bad,but if you did read it,I would appriciate it.Okay,here goes!

I rushed downstairs on a cool,winter day."Mom,I'm going to Ed and Al's house to play"I yelled to my mom."Be back by 5:45!"Shika Otsimaru said,waving goodbye.I grabbed my jaket,and ran outside.I was happy to be visting my friends.Ever since they moved closer to me,I've been visiting them every day.I turned another corner to see their house.I could see them outside with their mother,all of them waving at me.I smiled and waved back,running as fast as my 4-year-old body would take me.I fianally arrived."Hi Ed! Hi Al! Hi Mrs.Elirc!"I happily said,slipping my shoes off."Hello there Kara!"Mrs.Elric said,patting my head."Hey Kara!"Ed and Al both said.I walked into their new house with them,and I looked around."Woah! It's huge!"I said,looking and gawking at all the space.Mrs.Elric smiled."I'm glad you like it."She said."Wanna play tag?"Ed suggested."Yeah!"Al and I said.After a long time of deciding,we decided that I was it.Being the nice little girl I was,I let them have a 5 second getaway."I'm coming!"I yelled as I started to run.I could see their backs."I can see you!"I yelled,running faster.I fianaly got Ed,the ground."Take THAT,Mr.Ugly!"I said.Ed and Al left.I read a bit more of the book,and ran away.Ed started to run."I'm gunna get you!"He said.He tagged Al,and Al tagged me."Game Over."We all said."Wanna go explore?"Al said.Ed and I nodded.We walked for abit,and we found a big forest."Lets go inside!"I said,leading the way.After a while,it got dark and scary.L-Lets go..."Al and I said,being a little bit afraid.We all nodded,and went back to their house."It's 5:40."Mrs.Elric said."Aww,I best be on my way."I said,waving."Seeya tomoroww!"I said,running back home."Hiyas Mommy!"I said to my mom.She smiled and waved at me.I sat down at the dinner table with her."I had alot of fun today! We played tag,and we went exploring,and it'll be really fun!"I said,smiling.Mommy smiled."Thats great! I bet you can't wait until tomorrow!"Mommy said.I stared blankly at her."Uhh...."I said,forgetfully."Your birthday..."Mommy said.My eyes brightened."Oh yeah!"I said happily."Night night mommy! I'm going to bed early!"I said as I hugged mommy and ran upstairs.I brushed my teeth,and put on my pj's.I pulled out my red book with a black spine,took out a pen,and started to write.

February 15th
I had alot of fun today.I went to Ed and Al's house again.Their new house is huge!
We had alot of fun.We played tag,and then explored a really really big forest.It got
dart and creepy after a while.I can't wait until my birthday party tomorrow!It'll be great!

~Kara

The next morning,I almost fell out of bed.I shook off,and ran downstairs really fast.I ran into my basement,and looked at a bookshelf."Now where is it..."I said,jumping up to a high shelf.I started to search for a blue book,but I couldn't find it.I saw something,and guess what? It was the book! I reached over and pulled it out.Suddenly,the bookshelf started to shake.It felt like I was falling.I looked down,and guess what? I WAS falling with the bookshelf!The book shelf along with all the books landed ontop of me with a loud "thud".Hearing this,mommy woke up,and rushed downstairs.She saw my hand sticking out of the bookshelf.She pushed the bookshelf backwards,and saw me,under a pile of books.She dug me out."Oww...that hurt....LETS DO THAT AGAIN!"I yelled.Mommy smiled."That would almost kill you!"She said.I helped mommy put all of the books back where they were,and we went back upstairs.I had an extra-big lunch,because I missed breakfast.Once I was finished,I had nothing to do.So I went back into the basement,and picked up the same light blue book.The book read "ALCHEMY"On the front,but inside was some forgien language I can't read.I sighed."I wanna know alchemy..but the good thing is,Ed and Al do too! Maybe we could learn together!"I said happily.I heard a knock on the door.I ran up the stairs,tripped,and kept going up.I ran to the door and opened it."HIIIIII!"I claimed,as I saw Ed and Al at the door,they waved,and I let them in.I was excited to see them once again."Hi there,Kara!"They both said at the same time.I jumped up and down."I'm soo excited!"I said."I am too!"Ed said."Me too!!!"Al said.We all sat down,and started to give presents."We hope you like it."Ed and Al said.I took the beautifully wrapped rectangular thing.I shook it,and it made o noise.I slowly started to unwrap it.It was a blue book,reading "ALCHEMY".I flipped the pages.This book was in english.My mouth dropped open.I coundn't speak."T..T..THANK YOU!"I yelled as I ran to them and hugged them.They smiled."No problem!"Ed said."Lets go try it out!"I said,grabbing their hands and running into the basement."Oh yeah..."Al said.He dug in his pocket,and held out a bracelet to me."It's an Alchemy bracelet.It'll make it so you can do alchemy without making a transmutation circle thing.Ed held out the same bracelet."This is so you can do it with both hands."He said.I took the bracelets,and put them on.I blushed abit."Aww,thankies guys..."I said.They nodded."Now,lets try something..."I said,flipping the book to a certain page.I took mommy's favourite statue,and threw it on the ground."Take THAT Mr.Ugly!"I said.Ed and Al laughed.A continued reading.I took a peice of chalk,and drew a transmutation circle."I know I don't need to,But I'll do it anyways!"I said smiling.I put my hands on the edge of the circle.The circle started to glow a light yellow.Suddenly,a statue of a man appeared in the middle of the circle,and the circle dissapeared.Ed,Al and I stared at the statue."W...Who's next..."I said.Ed stood up.He took a book out of his bag,and ripped it up.He drew a circle around it,and it did the same thing.Al was next.He had a picture of the three of us.He ripped into shreds,and drew a circle.He did the same,and the picture went back to normal."YAY! WE DID IT!"I yelled happily.I heard another knock at the door.Mommy got it for me."Ed,Al,your mothers here."Mommy said."Aww.....See you guys tomoroww!"I said,waving bye bye.I went and ate dinner by myself.Mommy was out for the rest of the night.I did the same routine as last night,and took out the same book,and wrote:

February 16th
Yay! today was awsome! I got an alchemy book! It was so fun! We all did a little bit of alchemy! I'm really really really happe that were learning together!I can't wait till we learn the more difficult stuff,like.....growing things and making water come from nowhere and all that cool stuff! Well,I guess tomorrow will be even better!

~Kara(Birthday Girl)

I slowly got out of bed this morning.I was soooooo sleepy!I don't know what pushed me to do it,I I felt like reading the newspaper this morning.Just for fun,I read the deaths part.I scrolled down the list.Nobody I know ever dies!Suddenly,my finger stopped.My mouth dropped wide open,as a tear filled my eye.The name "Trisha Elric"Appeared in the deaths colum.I slowly started to cry.I ran back upstairs,and into mommy's room."What is it sweetie..."Mommy quietly said."M....Mommy...M...Mrs.Elric....SHe....She's.....G....one..."I said,trying to hold back my tears,but it wouldn't work."Where? where'd she go?"Mommy said.I hugged mommy."She's dead."I said.Mommy gasped."B-But why?"She said.I could hear tears filling her eyes too.I couldn't imagine how painful it would be for Ed and Al."I..I'm visiting them early today..."I said,as I ran to my room and got changed.I came out in a black suit,to honour Mrs.Elric.I got a white wooden box,and I put a stuffed bear inside it.I ran outside,and started to pick some flowers.The colours of white,purple,pink and red seemed to go good together.I ran inside and wrapped them in a pretty bouqet.I grabbed my black hat and jaket,and slowly walked down the street with the box in my arms.It felt like the whole world was looking at me.I made it to their house,and slowly knocked on the door.They opened the door.They weren't crying,but they had sad faces on.Suddenly,I fell to my knees,and burried my face in my hands.Al leaned down."It's okay Kara.Were alright."He said.I could hear that he was holding back tears.Al started to cry,and he hugged me.Ed hugged us both."It'll be alright..."He said.Being the oldest,he knew what was best.Al and I nodded.Today was also the day of the funeral.Ed and Al and I played for the whole day,trying to get our minds off of things.We played hide and go seek and Tag and Whoever moves first loses.It was pretty fun.When the funeral came,I took my white box.I was near the front.I was crying again.Why did she have to die? She was such a nice lady!I slowly walked to the grave,and put the teddy bear down and planted the flowers.After that,she walked towards the back and sat in the shade of the tree.The sun was slowly setting.While nobody was looking,Kara started to walk home alone.My mom was still at the funeral.I opened the door.I saw a note on the desk.I picked it up and unfolded it.I started to read it."Don't be afraid,everything will be alright."It read.I was shocked.I ran into the basement.It was like where I thrive every now and again.I sat in a chair in the corner.I looked besides me,and there was a black snake with a fire design on it."Charcoal,what should I do? She won't come back,and Alchmey probably can,but it's forbidden..."I said to my pet snake.The snake slithered onto my shoulder."Were only kids.Why does this stuff have to happen when were young? Next thing you know,we'll be in OUR graves too!"I continued to my snake.Charcoal seemed to nod his head.It was around 8:00."I should go to bed..."I said,getting changed.I once again took out my notebook,and started to write.

February 17th
Remember last time when I said today would be even better?Well guess what? It wasn't.Today sucked.Nothing was going right.Ed and Al's mommy passed away.I feel really sorry.I'm gunna miss her a whole bunch.If my mommy died,she would have been my second mommy.But it seems as if she died first.I hope Al and Ed can survive.All that cooking and housecleaning....And how will they get money?Uhh...I feel so guilty.HOPEFULLY tomorrow will be better.

~Kara

I'm new too, so don't worry. You are not alone. This is neat. I wonder sometimes what it would be like to know Ed and Al too...

Why are you using "Kara"?

Well, I read your fic. I'm guessing it's a 'Dear Diary' sort of fic, right? I think the idea is cute and you have a sweet style of writing.

I would, however, like to give you some suggestions:
- First of all: If you want people to read you fic, don't start off with saying it's bad. If you don't like it, and you wrote it, why should others want to waste there time on it?
You like it, don't you? And even if other people don't like it, you had fun writing it and that should be all that counts.

- Second: the [space] is you friend. (you know, the space between words and after a [.] or a [,]) You've forgotten it quite a few times. It makes your fic harder to read. And if something's hard to read, people will give up reading before they've reached the end.

That's about all.. Don't get me wrong, I really don't mean to offend you. Keep writing, the more you'll write the better they will be.

Ailuro:Cause Kara was my old made-up character,but now it's Krissy!

Keoni:Thanks for the tip! I think the story's okay,but there ARE some things I could inmprove.