This is my first ever fic! Please review and I'll update soon

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The ones we love the most
by fullmetal 4eva

Edward
Edward Elric showed up at Winry Rockbell’s (Ed and Al’s childhood friend) doorway one rainy night. It had been three years after he restored his younger brother’s body to it’s original form. Ed was unable to fix his own because shortly after finding the stone the homonculi attacked.

Ed awoke in a hospital bed at central, his brother sitting next to side in a ten year old body.

“Al is that really you?” Alphonse lifted his head in surprise. He hadn’t thought Ed would have woken up only three hours from nearly being killed! But Ed always had a few surprises up his sleeve.

“Brother! You’re awake!?” exclaimed the shocked but overjoyed Al.

“Al” he said weakly “You…You have your body back! But it hasn’t aged?”

“Oh, yeah” said Alphonse looking down at his newly restored body “but Ed we weren’t able to fix your limbs! The Homonculi attacked use and stole the stone! The tunnel caved in on us. Are you feeling ok brother?” asked the concerned Alphonse “You really should be sleeping.”

“Teh” Ed chuckled softly “I’m fine, I’m just glad you’re not hurt”

“Ed…..We should have restored your body first! It’s not fair I got mine back and you didn’t….”

“Al” Ed interrupted “My main priority was restoring you, I don’t mind having this artificial arm and leg. I’m just glad you’re back to normal”

Alphonse sighed; he knew this was a lie. Ed suffered greatly from those limbs. But he didn’t want Ed to argue when he was so badly hurt, he needed his rest.

Back to present

“Edward? W-what’s wrong?! Wha-where’s Al?”

“Winry….I should have been there for him. I…” Ed looked into those gorgeous blue eyes that were now filled with worry and concern. Tears began to roll down his face.

“Ed! You’re scaring me! Where’s Al, what’s going on?!” Winry yelled at him.

Suddenly Edward clung to her and both of them began cry in the rain. Somehow Winry already knew what he was about to say.

Newspaper: Alphonse Elric died when the recently escaped assassin Vincent Cooperman (made up name) attacked the young boy while he was walking to his hotel room. Alphonse’s body was never found. There was sign of a struggle, and it looked like the fight was dragged into the river. All that was they could find was Alphonse’s blood soaked jacket. Officers caught Cooperman but he was killed in doing so.

Alphonse

Ed had gone off to visit their old friends Russell and Fletcher Tringham. Al wanted to stay in central to study. Al was going to become a state alchemist along side his brother, despite the elder’s protests. But Alphonse made up his mind.

Alphonse knew he shouldn’t have stayed so late at the library but he was in deep thought while reading about manufacturing medicine using the science called alchemy. He would probably have stayed all night if the librarian hadn’t complained about how very tired he was and wish Al would just go home already!

On his way home he spotted a small creature shivering in a puddle. He took a closer look to investigate. It was a small kitten.

Alphonse Elric sighed. He knew Ed would be mad if he brought it with him. But Ed wasn’t home. Al smiled a mischievous smile. Edward wasn’t even in town so he wouldn’t know if he took care of it for a little while. Al couldn’t just leave in the cold to suffer after all!

That’s when he turned around to see the murderer.

Edward

After waving goodbye to Russell and Fletcher, Ed made his way up the streets of
Xenotime. Then he saw a pay phone in the corner of his eye. ‘Maybe I’ll give Al a call to let him know I’m going to take an earlier train home’.

“Mr. Edward Elric!?”

“Huh? Yeah that’s me.” said Ed and turned around. The man who had called his name was in military uniform but was probably just security personal ‘Why dose the military need to find me?’ Ed wondered.

“Mr. Elric, I have a message from Colonel Roy Mustang!” The man handed him a letter, gave Ed a quick salute, then got into his car and left.

Ed sighed. ‘Don’t tell me he wants me to do a mission?! I’m on vacation.’ Ed glanced at the envelope and frowned ‘I better just get it over with.’

It read:


Dear Major Edward Elric,

I am extreme sorry to inform you that Mr. Alphonse Elric was labeled deceased after the search party was unable to recover his body. To receive more information contact me at Central Military Headquarters. If….

Ed didn’t even finish reading. A search party?! He wasn’t even informed that Al was missing! Was this some kind of a sick joke? Edward quickly rushed to the train station to see when the next train to Central was.

He was practically hysterical. Ed wished he could find a pay phone ‘I should have used the one next to where the Tringham brothers where staying.’ And where the hell was that damn train?!

At Colonel Roy Mustang’s Office

“Sir, Edward Elric is here” informed Riza.

Roy looked up from his paperwork and sighed. This wasn’t going to be a fun conversation.

“Alright, send...”

All of a sudden Ed stormed in. “What the hell is this letter about!?”

Roy stared at the angry blonde. “Ed, I’m really upset to be the one to tell you. I’m so sorry.” Roy gave Ed a sympathetic look.

“W-What? This can’t really be true.”

Roy only kept on staring sadly.

“This can’t be true” Ed whispered to himself but not softly enough for Roy and Riza not to hear.

Present

After telling her what happened to his little brother, Ed left Winry who was sobbing and went into the room he and his younger brother stayed when they visited Winry and Aunt Pinako (who had passed away a year ago from old age).

It seemed so empty in the room. So quiet. He didn’t like the alone feeling.

‘Why did I leave him alone? I’m his big brother I’m suppose to protect him’ Ed thought to himself ‘This isn’t the first time I let him down.’ Remembering about how Al lost his body when they tried to bring back their dead mother.

“Damn why do I always screw everything up?!” Ed slammed his right fist into the wall, it left a dent.

‘Why do I sometimes feel like everyone would be better off if I wasn’t around?’ Ed sighed, some more tears began to fall from his eyes. He couldn’t accept the fact that Al, his little brother, his only real family left was gone. Of course he still had Winry, but he could never talk to her about things he could always talk to Al about.

“Ed?” Winry cracked the door open. “Are you ok? I heard a noise.”

He could tell she by her voice she had just woken up. “I’m fine Winry, sorry to wake you” Ed replied softly.

“Oh., ok” She began to close the door.

“Winry”

“Hm?”

“Could you stay with me tonight?” He asked.

“Sure Ed” Winry smiled softly. She walked over and sat on the bed across from him. “Ed….It’s…It’s not your fault for what happened to Al”

After a short silence, “Then why do I feel so horrible Winry? I should have bin there, he needed me and I wasn’t there.” He looked up at her. Ed could tell she was on the verge of crying again. “I just feel so alone, and it hurts.”

“Oh Ed! You’re not alone!” Winry said crying and hugging him at the same time. They fell asleep there, with him in her arms.

TO BE CONTINUED no it's not over

It's well written but I think there's not enough descriptions and it's kind of messed up. It's gonna be a EdWin, right? So if Alphonse is really dead, you just got rid of him so Ed could run to Winry like this and be with her? I never saw that kind of fic so I don't know if I can call it a cliché plot... And if Al'd die, Ed would certainly be destroyed and in this fic, he's not enough touched by his brother's death! So I think I'll see what happens next time even if EdXWinry is definitly not my favorite pairing.

I agree, and EdxWinry is also not my pairing... I prefer RoyxRiza...

thanx for being honest and its only a lil bit edxwin(wait and see). i'll update after a few more reviews

i liked it. i only don't understand why you give head lines rfor past and present when the way the text is written sais the same. that's my only suggestion.
and i have absolutely nothing against edXwin, opposite, i'll be glad to see it^^ and i have that feeling that al isn't really dead with scar the case was the same - only bloodied jacket found

Hey dzioo, maybe your right . DUN DUN DUN!

Okay next chapter!!! Don't Forget to review!

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Alphonse

Alphonse Elric opened his eyes. “Where, where am I?” He looked around, he was on a mat in some kind of crudely made hut, he could see through the hut’s flap a little, the sun was rising.

The last thing he remembered was fighting with this guy who attacked him when he was walking home. They ended up by a river and he blacked out. He suddenly felt a sharp pain in his side.

Alphonse lifted the blanket on top of him. He saw a tightly wrapped bandage around his chest. ‘That man had injured him on his left side; he had a rather long rusty knife.’
Al thought to himself ‘But how did I end up here?’

Suddenly a young girl entered. “Grandpa! He woke up!!!” She looked at Al “How are you feeling?”

“I, I’m fine. Where am I?”

The girl was about to respond when a man came in. He had long gray hair and noticeable wrinkles but he had a body of a 20 year old man.

‘He’s in very good shape’ Alphonse thought to himself while observing the man.

He also had a very kind and caring face. “Hello, young man. We were all very worried about you!”

“Huh? I don’t…What happened?”

“I’m not sure, my granddaughter found you at the bank covered in blood. I’m surprised you even survived after losing all that blood. You were unconscious for three days.”

“Three days!” ‘Great!’ Al thought to himself ‘Ed’s sure gonna be pissed off at me. He’ll say stuff like ‘What the HELL where you thinking Al?! You can’t wander the streets that late at night alone! You’re such an idiot, seriously I thought you were mature enough that I could leave you alone for a couple of days!” Alphonse sighed. He hated when Ed acted more like a father than a brother.

“So you don’t know how you ended up in the river?”

“Wha?” Al looked up at him “Oh sorry! I was attacked by this guy and then blacked out.” Al then tried to get up only to be stopped by the man.

“You are still recovering. You need rest.” He began to leave but asked “By the way, what’s your name?”

“It’s Alphonse Elric sir”

“Well Alphonse my name is Brick and this is Lily” he said pointing to his granddaughter.

‘What strange names’ Al thought to himself ‘I hope Ed’s not too worried.’

Edward

Ed just got off the phone with Colonel Roy Mustang. He said that Ed should take some time off and recover. ‘What the hell did that mean? It was Al who had suffered, people shouldn’t be worried about me.’

Winry looked up from her auto-mail book “Who was that Ed?” Winry could see a stressed out look on his face.

“That was Mustang, I said that I should take some time off from missions. I don’t even know if I’m going back.” He laughed. “Before I just did them because Al and I had fun.”
But his happy expression quickly left his face.

“Oh” Said Winry frowned a bit after seeing Ed’s face.

Ed moaned and flopped onto the couch.

“I wish they could at find Al’s body, then we could give him a proper burial. You know?” Said Winry smiling slightly.

“Yeah” replied Ed sadly while fiddling with his auto-mail arm.

“Stop screwing with your auto-mail!!!” Winry yelled at him

“Ok, Ok! Sorry, geez” Ed knew she only said this to change the subject; she didn’t want him not to think about Al too much, thought it’d make him even more depressed. But it actually made him feel better; he didn’t want to forget about Al. No matter what.

Alphonse

After about a week in bed after waking up, Al felt well enough to get up and walk around. Really the only company he got was Lily. She wasn’t much older than him, maybe 14, or 15. She was really nice and easy to talk to. But when ever he asked where he was she’s suddenly change the subject. This bothered Al. Was it a secrete or something?

The first the steps were easy, but then he would feel another sharp pain in his side. After carefully making his way to the flap he lifted it to see something bizarre. Alphonse wondered why he was in a hut in the first place but saw there were many of these shelters. Maybe 30 or so. Everybody around him were wearing simple handmade clothes and there was no electricity at all! ‘Where the hell am I?!’ Al thought.

Something caught Lily’s eye, it was Al! He was standing out side the hut staring at everyone. She quickly ran to find her grandfather.

He saw everybody was doing chore. Some were tending some fires, others were leading animals to a meadow to graze, and everyone had a special job. Al thought the scene was so weird. Then he heard his name being called.

Al turned around to see Brick running up to him. “Where am I Brick?”

Brick finally caught up to Alphonse and stopped to catch his breathe. When his breathing slowed down and he looked at Al. “This is peace valley. A village away from the monstrosities of this world. Evils such as cars, telephones, and the dreaded so-called “science” called alchemy!”

Al looked around ‘Is this some kind of cult or something?’ He thought to himself.

Edward

Ed laid in bed staring at the ceiling, he must have been laying there for hours. Just thinking.

What would he do now? Before he’d mainly just been doing the missions Mustang gave him. Al would come sometimes if it wasn’t a dangerous one. They didn’t really have a goal. Should really just forget about the military? ‘I need to get away from here for a little bit, and I guess all I really can do is play dog of the military.’ Winry had been great but he couldn’t stay there for much longer.

She felt so bad for him. Ed felt like she pitied him, even thought he knew deep down she would never do such a thing. The fact was he couldn’t stay in one spot, he needed just get on with his life, even if it hurt so bad.

Ed decided to visit Roy tomorrow and get a mission. Winry would be upset, but understand.

Central

First Lieutenant Hawkeye came into Roy’s office. “Ed’s here sir,”

Roy was shocked “I’m surprised, it hasn’t even been a week since his brother died.”

“I would think it’d be harder for him to stay in one play, you know Edward.”

Roy sighed. She was right, Ed wasn’t the type to just mope around feeling sorry for himself. “Send him in.”

“Hello, Colonel” Ed said not looking at Roy.
“Fullmetal.” Mustang replied. “Here is your assignment, there is a small village off Eastern Headquarters, and they call it a peace valley. But they trick young men and women into joining their cult in the name of god.”

“It’s a bunch of crap if you ask me.” Ed said with a smirk.

“Yes, well you need to shut down the establishment, the last officer who went there ended up joining them. They are either very persuasive or make people join by force. Oh and they hate people who use alchemy. They say it’s against the will of god.”

Ed smiled to himself and thats what Scar believed that too.

Alphonse

It had bin two days since he had first discovered where he was. He kept on trying to meet up with Brick so he could ask how Al could return home. When ever he asked the villagers they would simply reply “You need to ask Brick about that.” Everyone had strange names. Men would have names of types of stone, like Shell or Shale. All the girls had names of flowers.

It turns out Brick was the leader of this “peace valley” and was very busy. To pass the time Al would explore the strange village and help out with chores.

It was the least Alphonse could for helping him. He would mostly help out by collecting the night’s firewood.

Even though everyone was very kind Alphonse thought there was something very wrong with the picture. He was very cautious of what he said around people. If he mentioned something about modern technology they would automatically hush him and give him a dirty look. ‘I can only imagine what they would found out I was an alchemist.”

Finally one night Alphonse caught a glance of Brick at breakfast, which was very odd since he would usually eat alone. “Brick!” Al shouted hoping to catch his attention.

Brick turned around to see Alphonse calling to him. “Alphonse, how nice it is to see you!”

“Err, it’s nice to see you too. I was wondering if I could have a quick word with you?”

“Okay. Let’s take a walk.” He said gesturing Al to follow him outside.

They walked by many huts when Al asked “Sir, I was wondering if you could tell me how to, to get home?”


Brick sighed “I was wondering when you would ask me this. Al, I can’t let you go home.” Brick said calmly with out even glancing at Al.

“W-What do you mean I can’t go home?!” The shocked Al said slightly raising his voice. “I have to see my brother and my friends! I can’t stay here!”

“Well I can’t let such a young boy go back to that horrible place. You are still young and naive . You don’t know what’s best for you.” He said all of this with out even changing his expression.

“And you know what’s best for me?! You don’t even know me!” Said the startled Al.
He couldn’t believe that a guy he thought was so nice was doing this to him.

“I know you’re kind.”

“I have a family back home that cares about me!”

“If your family cared about you so much they would have been with you that night and you wouldn’t have been attack.” Brick simply stated.

“It’s not their fault I’m stupid enough to go out by myself late at night.” Giving Brick and angry look. “You can’t keep me here!!!!”

“Oh really? I’ll just let you know that if you even try to escape Lily will be the one who has to pay the price.”

‘This guy’s a maniac!’ Al was really worried now. “She’s your own granddaughter! You’re bluffing.”

“You’d be surprise at what lengths I’ll go to get what I want Alphonse. She always brags about how good buddies you two have become.” Brick started to look more crazed as the conversation went on. It was amusing to him.

“You, You’re a horrible person!”

“Nice of you to notice.”

‘What do I do now?!’ Al pondered to himself.

TO BE CONTINUED! hey I couldn't really kill off a main character right?

It's better...But Ed is still not enough touched by his brother's death for me!

Remember the last episode:

[SPOILER]He KILLED himself to bring back Al![/SPOILER]

But like you said, you can't kill a main character...

And now Ed will go like this to the village where his brother is...Hum...I would have thought he would go search for the philosopher's stone the homunculus stole to revive Al! And I don't know why but this Lily...I feel the Mary Sue coming!!!
So the problem is: Characters that are not enough IC (especially Winry!) but I'll see next time!

Well, Winry isn't reallly in much of the story. *sigh* well after this story is over I'll just work harder on my stories.

It's okay! I'm sorry if I sounded rude! Your fic isn't so bad especially if you're a beginner! You just need to insert more plot! The homunculus have the PS now, right? Who knows what they could do with it! I'm sure it will be more interesting if you put them in the story! Of course, it's only a homunculus fangirl who is speaking! Maybe you have other ideas! Keep up the work and we'll see how it'll end up because it's good for a beginning!

Okay, sorry that I didn't update, I kinda forgot about it heh heh heh, anyways here's the next chapy!

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Edward

Edward sighed a deep sigh as he got off the train. It had been an extremely boring train ride with out Al to talk to. All he could do was stare out the window. Mountain, after Mountain after, Mountain. Ed hoped he could finish this mission quickly so he could visit Winry afterwards.

How was he going to even find the place? Colonel Roy Mustang didn’t even give him directions. Ed would just have to ask around.

It was a nice city. A lot of the houses where pretty old and had very detailed stonework.

Just then Ed saw a bar coming up in the distance. “I’ll stop there and ask a couple of people.” said Ed even thought no one was around to hear him. As he walked in Ed was surprised to find the bar packed. Very few people were walking in the streets. After scanning the room Ed found an empty seat at the counter. The bartender walked up to him and asked “So what can I get ya?”

“Huh? Oh I don’t know”

“One beer coming up!” He said winking at Ed.

When the bartender came back Ed asked “Have you heard of a ‘peace valley’ around here?”

The man’s cheerful expression suddenly left and was replaced with a stern glare. “
“Why would you want to know?! Don’t tell me you want to join that crazy town! Let me tell you many good men and women have been tricked into joining them in the name of god! I don’t want another young man like you getting tangled up in their web of crazy lies. If you…”

Ed interrupted “Calm down! I’m not trying to find them so I can live there. I’m Edward Elric the Fullmetal Alchemist” And pulled out his pocket watch “I was sent to shut down the establishment. There have been rumors that people have been forced to join and are being refused the right to leave.”

“The Fullmetal Alchemist! Wow, I’ve heard a lot about you and all the great things you’ve done! It’s about time someone straightened out that Brick guy.”

“Brick?”

“Yeah, he’s the leader” He wrote something down on a note pad and gave it to Ed. “Here’s how you get there.”

“Thanks for your help!” Ed began to reach into his pocket for money but was stopped by the man.

“It’s on the house. Thank you for helping those poor people.” He said smiling.

“Err, welcome.” Ed said smiling embarrassed.

Lily

Lily’s friend Rose came running up behind her. “Lily! Where are you going?”

“Hm? Oh, I was just going to visit Al.”

“That boy?” She said making a face “You have a weird taste in guys. Anyways, didn’t you hear? There is a town meeting! Come on!” Lily rushed after Rose to the town barn. (the only place with electric lights)

“Welcome Everyone” Brick bellowed so everyone could hear. Lily saw that Al was standing behind him on the stage. Why did he look so sad? “I have some wonderful news! I’m sure all of you know two weeks ago this young man came to us injured and in need of help. Well he has now decided to with us in our peaceful valley.” The crowd clapped and cheered loudly. Al just smiled weekly.

‘I didn’t know he was staying! Why didn’t Al tell me, I thought we were really close’ thought Lily but something else troubled her. ‘He’s always talking about his great brother and close friends. Why would he just leave them? I’ll have to talk to him later.’

Alphonse

Alphonse laid on the lush grass by the bank. Something caught his eye. There was something dried on the grass blades. Little droplets of what looked like blood. ‘This must have been where Lily found me. I lost a lot of blood’ He thought looking around. All the grass was covered in dried blood. Why hadn’t he noticed it before? Suddenly he heard his name being called. Al jumped up and turned around it was Lily.

“Al! There you are, I’ve been looking all through the village for you!” She painted trying to catch her breath. “What are you doing here?”

“Just thinking.”

“Oh…Al…”

“Yea?”

“Why didn’t you tell me you were staying?” Lily gave Al a hurt look.

“Oh, well I, I didn’t know I was.” Lily gave him a quizzical look.

“What do you mean? And why are you staying anyways? What about all the people who care about you back home?”
“Lily you don’t understand. I didn’t really have a choice.” Al began when a loud gunshot was heard in the background. They both spun around and ran towards the loud noise.

Edward

It turns out the man’s information was very useful. He found the place with out any trouble. But soon found the entire came closed off with fences. After an hour of hiking around the camp he saw an entrance guarded by two men.

‘This will be easy enough’ He thought walking up to the men.

“Hey ! You there! What are you doing here?!”

Ed held out his pocket watch. “I’m with the state, take me to the person running this rat hole.”

“Ha! Yeah right punk.” He held up a rather large rifle. “Listen, I suggest you turn around and leave before we make you.”

“Look I’ve got a job to do, take me to leader of this camp!”

Both guards became shooting rapidly. When the smoke cleared up they only to saw a large stone wall. “What the? Where’d he go?!” The guard looked up and saw Ed standing on a tree branch. Ed jumped down knocking out the guard. While the other man thought ‘Holy shit, this guy means business. I better tell Brick.’

Ed got up and saw the other man running away and many members of the village running towards the entrance yelling at each other.

“What’s an outsider doing here?!”

“I heard gun shots! Did he bring weapons to our peaceful valley?!”

“Somebody get Brick, he’ll know what to do.”

Then he saw someone running to him never thought he’d ever see again. It was Al.

Alphonse

When he and Lily reached the entrance they found most of the village was already there. They all seemed to be talking about this one guy by the entrance but the crowd was so large he couldn’t make out who it was. Struggling to make his was through the mass he saw a very familiar young man. He had blonde hair, a red coat and piercing gold eyes.

“Brother? Brother is that you?” He excitedly ran over to the blonde staring at him. It was his Ed. Al gave his older brother a huge hug. Before that Al had doubted that he’d ever see his big bother again and was overjoyed Ed had found him.

Ed looked down at the boy hugging him. “Al?” he whispered, his voice shaky. “Is it really you?”

Alphonse looked up at him. “Of course it’s me! How did you know where to find me?”

Ed quickly embraced Al, afraid that if he let go he’d lose his little brother again.

“Ed what’s wrong? I mean I’m sure you’d be happy to see me but, you’re acting like you haven’t seen me in years.”

“Al…” Ed searched for something in his back pocket and pulled it out. “I-I though you wear dead.” He held out a piece of paper.

Al took the paper from Ed and read it out loud “Alphonse Elric died when the recently escaped assassin Vincent Cooperman attacked the young boy while he was walking to his hotel room….” He stared at the article with disbelief “Brother you really thought I had…”

Tears were beginning to form in Ed’s eyes. He hugged Al again. “I’m sorry Al.”

“Sorry? Sorry for what? I’m the one who should be sorry, I didn’t mean to worry you like that.”

“No Al, I’m a horrible big brother! I shouldn’t have left you alone, I’m such an idiot!” Ed said smacking himself in the head.

“Of course you’re not brother!” Al “Don’t say things like that!”

Al was interrupted by Lily “Al, who is this guy?”

“Oh! Lily this is my older brother Ed.”

“Really, but why is he here? I thought you were going to stay with us?!”

“What’s she talking about Al?” He looked to his brother “You can’t stay here! What about Winry, and…”

“Brother, I didn’t have a choice.” Al looked up sadly.

“What do you mean!? They wouldn’t let you leave!!!” Ed become furious, so the rumors were true. Now they were going to pay for doing this to Al.

“The leader Brick said if I didn’t stay they would hurt Lily.” He tried to say it in a low enough voice so she wouldn’t hear. She heard anyway.

Lily gave out a gasped. “What!? No, Grandfather cares about me! He would never do such a thing! You’re lying!”

Suddenly a voice was heard coming from the crowd. “I’m sorry Lily but Al’s telling the truth.” Brick stepped out into the opening.

To Be Contiued I'll update sooner this time :

Ei your story is comming along well you need to write more, AND FASTER I MEAN DAMN YOUR SLOW

I need inspiration, and your not really helping much.

I'll give you inspiration!

I quite enjoy your story, I find it exciting and unique. I really can't wait for the next chap, so please continue.

Hi Sis! Awesome Fanfic! Can't Wait To Read More!!