okay dillie dokay!!! i just got back from singing for old peeps in chorus so i am majorly hyped!!! here is the tragic tale of a tortured youth!!! well not realy. i suck at writing!!! oh and it is my first oneshot unless i go on(READERS CHOICE!!!)

"Nobody can explain it
Some say she's still alive
They even claim they've seen her
On the shoreline late at night
So if you go down by the water
You'll see her footprints in the sand
'Cause every night she walks the beaches of Cheyenne"
-Garth Brooks

"Winry couldnt belive it. Roy promised to come home to Cheyenn. But then he goes off and... dies. She loved him. She bore his child. She and him bought ocean front property together. She was so upset. she punched four holes in one wall and ripped almost every door off the hinges. it wasnt fair to her that her life died and went away. everything in her life was worthless now. she loved him and he loved her. she never even got to say goodbye. now she didnt know what to do. her life, love and dreams were all gone. the only thing of him she had left was his unborn child. her head and heart both ached. knowing that the only thing kepping her from letting go of all that was left of her life was her child. she didnt even want it. she didnt want any reminder of him. it was too painfull. she looked out of her window. the ocean breeze flowed through her house. she started to whisper, 'Roy, the ocean is all i have left. i hate your child. i dont want it,' she went into a shout, 'WHY THE HELL DID YOU LEAVE ME??? I CANT DO THIS WITHOUT YOU!!! ROY! ROY! ROY!' she kept screaming his name. she ran out the doorless doorway. to the ocean. never to touch the same shore again."
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was it good? well i might not make it a oneshot if you dont want, but if it is not a oneshot, i am baseing all chapters off a different song.

Reply! DAMMNIT!!!

Now, I'm not an expert writer, but I will try. The way it was all bunched up in one paragraph kinda bugged me. You should put more spaces in it so it doesn't look so...unattractive. In my opinion Winry was kinda out of character. I don't think Roy and Winry would get together since there's too much of an age difference, but your story, so you can do whatever you want with it. Other than that, it was ok.

well yeah... um i will write more. i am all for ed and winry and i just put that in to kill off a nonmain charactor. I HAD WRITERS BLOCK, DAMMNIT!!!

Uh.....Roy? Winry?
o_o
What kinda fantasy world do you live in?
o.O"
I don't think, (if this gets turned into more than a one shot) I'll be a loyal lurker...
Nothing personal, it's that, Winry and Roy?

no but see, i am now flipping it and making it into a WinxEd. i hate roy and win. that is why i killed hiM!!!!! BWA HA HA HA HA !!!!!

Ahaha royxed huh? Well keep going, if you gunna change into edxwinry do it (for me) but don't let anyone tell you what to write okay? I would like to read more, so update soon!

Yes, the RoyxWinry pairing scared me.

No, let me rephrase that...

The RoyxWinry pairing has scarred me for life.

That ending line made me think she went and drowned herself or something.

Work on it a little 'kay? I'm sure after a few falls and stumbles along the way you'll be able to create better fics that we'll all read and say "OMFG! She is SUCH a great writer!" So just try and improve and every time you'll get just a little better.

-Phyco girl

KK! i am going to write more in a while but now my sis (hate her for it) wants to get on the comp at the one time i dont have writers block!!! HATE R!!! luv ya storries too!!!
DIE XRNINJA!!!!
have a nice day and eat your veggies!
LR Fullmetal Yuna Signing off!!!
ninja monkeys luv em! they will rule the world with the smurfs!!!

what the hell did i do to you?

Your job, closing her thread. ; )

ohhhh. forgot about that. well, fullmetalyuna, if you come up with some legitimate reasons on why i should re-open your closed thread, i'll open it right back up for you.

Reasons to open my thread back up.
1. It is useful
2. I worked hard on it.
3. It made me upset you closed my thread.
4. It isnt fair to me that even though i am not a popular site member, i cant post news threads.
5. I will leave the site and get my home friends to leave too.
Hope thats enough. And why the hell is this on my fic, i know i started it but couldnt you PM me?read the book by pain.

Please add more. I wanna know what you have to write. The RoyxWinry scared me. NO, not scarred, but scared. I will get over it soon tho.

well i will do it later. i got my other fic. i have like 4 chapters in one so read it. it is called mia but it wont be up for a while!

1. It has already been reported and existing threads it is no longer useful.

2. Sorry you worked hard on it but next time write in existing threads.

3. Oh, my gosh. This is going to help open your thread.

4. You think this site is bias towards members? Bacon has been a member for a long time and his threads sometimes get moved. Me, I made an existing thread and was it closed because there was another thread mine didn't need to exist. I'm not complaining.

5. The end of the world is coming near. SAVE ME, PLEASE! Seriously, this site will still move on.

Hi, It's me again. I hope you do something again, and this, (for some reson unknown) has inspired me to write more in my lil' ficcy! TO MY THREAD! UP,UP, AND AWAY!!!! Hope you update!

hey all. i have had a horrible day. my teacher accused me of using cliff notes on a book report. i spent all of first block crying in the guidence office. i am so glad that i have good friends. they helped me. my friend rosemary helped me by telling me her fortune which said when she was 99 years old she would die from a giant sock.

I like this fic! Sorry about your horrible day! Please add more!