My first attempt at a Fic.

This is going to take place instead of the ending in the anime.

This will just be a quick intro to see if people like the idea for the story.

Im a sucker for EdWinry Romances, so this will probably have that along with some angst.

Character thoughts will be in ()'s

Anyways, here goes nothing.

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Chapter 1: A tragic error.

The sound of a clap rang out.

It was the sound of the older Elric starting a transmutation. His brother lay, along with the philosopher’s stone, in the center of a transmutation circle in front of him.

"Ready Al?" Edward asked.

"Yes brother," Al replied excitedly

Ed placed his hands down on the circle and instantly a swirling blue and purple light filled the room. As soon as it began Ed knew something was wrong. Something didn’t feel right. He looked up to see Al’s armor body being replaced by a body of flesh and blood. Ed managed to feel relieved. His comfort only lasted a few seconds though. He looked up to see the gate appearing before them both.

The gate opened and pulled Al inside.

"BROTHER!!!" "AL!!!" they both screamed as they were torn apart.

Ed sat there, for what seemed like just a few minutes, starring off into space lost in thought. He was still held by a powerful disbelief. He wanted to wake up. To feel it was all a dream. But he couldn’t. He was in reality. A cruel, harsh reality.

Eventually he awoke from his trance. He began a desperate search for a remnant of the philosopher’s stone. It was in vain. All of the stone had disappeared along with Al. Ed fell down on the floor and began to weep.( Al, it's all my fault. Once gain, it's all my fault. Why couldn’t I restore you successfully? Are my sins too great to atone for. Have I wronged completely irreparably? Why did you disappear? I won’t let you leave me, Al. If I have to I will spend the rest of my life trying to get you back.) The minutes had actually been several hours. Just then he realized that his automail was gone, all of his limbs were made of flesh and blood. Ed was confused momentarily before he figured out what had happened.(Al, you idiot, you changed the transmutation circle for this to happen. Thats why you disappeared.) He felt slightly relieved. It wasn’t completely his fault for Al getting pulled through the gate.

Ed realized he had one thing to do. As much as he hated to do it, he had to. He had to tell Mustang what happened. He had to tell him he was not going to do anything for the military unless it helped him make progress towards his new goal. He then really stood up and began his new walk forward.

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I know that was short, but I had it in my head and I had to write it down. I will begin work on better and longer chapters. Please post your thoughts,

It seemed to go rather quickly but it was still a good piece of work. I realise the intention was for it to be quick however so I shall wait for your other work

Yeah im pretty bad on describing things and I do like a quick pace. I'll try and slow things down a bit if I continue this story.

That was a very well written peice. Keep up the good work^_^

-Phyco girl

ok so i decided to try a second chapter.


Chapter 2: I quit
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"Colonel, Edward is here to see you"

"Thank you lieutenant. Please send him in.

Ed trudged into Mustang's office. The look in his eyes was that of someone who had just been torn apart. He approached Mustang's desk.

"Yes, Full Metal?"

Ed didn't reply. Instead he reached down and grabbed his pocket watch and tossed it to Mustang. Mustang's smirk was immediately off of his face. He could only look back at Ed with a face full of confusion. As Ed turned to walk towards the door Mustang spoke.

"Full Metal, wait."

Ed heard him but refused to. As he reached the door Mustang shouted at him.

"Edward!"

Ed then turned around, Mustang never referred to him by his name.

"What is it Colonel?" Ed snapped back.

The harshness in his words nearly knocked Mustang out of his chair. However he regained his composure and then asked.

"Why are you giving me your watch, Full Metal?"

"I quit."

"Why? For what reason?"

"Al." was all Ed could bring himself to say.

"Did something happen?"

"He’s gone" Ed was able to say through a huge lump in his throat.

"Gone?"

"Yes gone! Through the gate! And I’m going to bring him back." Ed said this as he stormed out of the building. Mustang could only sit there in bewilderment. ‘Al..gone…how….damn it… Full Metal’ was all the colonel could think.

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Ed decided he now needed to go home. He needed to go see Winry and Pinako. He had to tell them what happened. Ed wasn’t sure what he would do after that. He had no idea where to begin. All he knew is that by his hands his brother had been pulled through the gate. He would allow nothing to stop him from returning Al to this world.

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Ed awoke slowly as the train was coming to a stop. He had slept the whole ride to Resembool. He slowly got up and prepared to get off the train. When the large crowd had gotten off the train he stood up and got off the train as well. As soon as he exited the train he realized he left all of his stuff inside his dorm in Central. After a few minutes of thought, he decided he would go back to get it later. Or perhaps he could ask a favor from Mustang.....unlikely.

‘Guess I better go ahead and go to Winry’s’ Ed thought.

The thought of seeing Winry actually slightly eased his worries. He wasn’t sure why it did. He only knew he was going to be a little happier when he got there.

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Winry reached up and wiped the sweat off of her forehead. She had been working on a new idea for an arm for about 5 hours straight. She decided it was time for a break and she walked into the kitchen. As she was getting a glass of water there was a knock on the front door.

"Now who could that be?" Winry said to herself.

She walked over to the door and opened it. There he stood, but looking as he did on his mothers funeral so many years ago.

"Ed?" was all that Winry could manage to say.
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I tried to slow down the speed a tad bit. So I struggled to maintain a constant, steady train of thought too, it was quite tempting to start typing incoherent thoughts but i tried to stay focused.

Let me know if this is heading in a good direction.

Yeah I agree that it may be a tad rushed. But I don't like to critisize because I wouldn't know a god damn thing. I found this enjoyable. Nothing like Ed trying to get his brother back. Hope you update soon! It's one of the essentials of a kind writer who cares about their readers. Please for me

Yeah, im trying to work on slowing down and putting more detail and other stuff into it.

Oh and, I have to say stand up and walk forward is easily my favorite fic.

OoOoOoOoOoOo.......I love it! And I understand how you wanna just start typing all your ideas down! I do that all the time. I love it though! Oh, and does anyone else recognize my name??? Hope you do!