This is my first Fullmetal Alchemist fic so dont be rough!

Edward Elric stared out of the limo window. Tears fell down his cheeks. No matter who it was, he hated to see people die. But this time it was personal. Winry Rockbell and her Grandmother were his good friends. A week earlier, he had gotten a note that read:

Misters Edward and Alphonse Elric,

Under a cause of misfortune, Elder Rockbell has passed on. The cause of the death was a house-fire caused by passerby’s mischief. It was in her will that you attend the service. Please respond. It is also of Miss Winry Rockbell’s wishes that you attend. Thank you,
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He hadn’t spoken to Winry since the RSVP. He got out of the limo. Behind him came a large suit of bodiless armor.
“Come on, Al.” Ed spoke very calmly.
As the service began, there was no sight of Winry. The rain fell down. Ed grew kind of worried. All the umbrellas opened up. Ed suddenly stopped feeling the raindrops. And with no doubt, there stood Al with an umbrella over both of there heads.

After the service…
“Come on, boys.” Armstrong called out as a limo approached him.
“Give us a second. We need to see someone.” Ed called back.

Since Winry’s house was gone, she could only be in one other place that Al and Ed could think of.

Not the greatest fic. but a good start. Please continue

-Phyco girl

thank you. i think. well it is my first FMA fic. the first 2 chaps are realy dull but it gets better. i promise. when i make a promise on a fanfic, i always keep it!

chapter 2

“Where are we going brother?” Al wondered where his brother was taking him.
“To find Winry.”
“Where is she?”
“You’ll see when we get there.”
They walked up the hill. When they got to the top, they both almost burst into tears. The homey little house that always welcomed them, now only welcomed sadness. The only thing left was a pile of rubble and ash. They spotted a blond sphere in the middle of it. Ed ran over. Al followed. They heard silent sobs as they approached. They stopped at where the entrance to the house was. Winry sat in the pile of rubble sobbing.
“Winry, you have to come with us. You have to forget about this.” Just then, Ed noticed the two people sitting next to her.
“No! I want to stay here! Let me be!” Winry sat there yelling like she was insane.
“Winry!” Al called out.
Winry looked up.
“Al!” She got up and ran over to Al and Ed. She collapsed right as she got in front of them. Al came down and comforted her.
“I am so sorry. Pinako was a good person. Ed even thought so.” Al said not realizing that Ed had already turned around and hiked down the hill to obey the calls of Armstrong. He stopped and looked back up the hill. He was about to yell for Al and Winry until he saw the two of them walking down the hill.

Winry didn’t say anything the entire ride. She was being taken to Alchemy headquarters with Ed and Al. Everyone agreed that she could stay with them for as long as she needed as long as she earns her keep by repairing auto-mail and other things around headquarters.

When they arrived at HQ, they were greeted by Fuhrer.
“Is this the girl who will be staying in HQ?” he asked pointing to Winry.
“Yeah. Please tell me she gets her own room!” Ed said adding his usual smart-ass joke.
“Of course. It would be inappropriate to have her room with a tin can and a smart-ass!” Lt. Roy Mustang remarked appearing from behind Fuhrer.
“Stop talking about your ugly-ass self!” Ed yelled.
“Your just jealous I am so damn beautiful and your such a damn shrimp! Don’t hate me because I am beautiful and have such a sexy accent!”
“I will kill you for that!” Ed yelled pouncing on to Mustang.
“Excuse me!” Fuhrer yelled over the commotion. Both boys returned to their upright positions.
“Well, Miss Rockbell, I know that you have been through a lot so you may report to your room at once. I will not expect you to be used to your surroundings for a while. Lt. Mustang will take you to your room and brief you on the rules.”
”Thank you, sir.” Winry said it being the first thing she said in a while.
“Right this way.” Mustang said as he led Winry to her room and winked back at Ed.
“Edward, her room is right next to yours. Later I would like for you to check in on her. Give her this" he said holdong out a uniform," She will have to wear it. No one is to know she is a guest staying here. Oh, and Edward, If you or Alphonse here any thing as to a low scream from her room, you will check it out. Heaven forbid the reporters finding out there was a guest here but this being under the protection of the military and a guest being killed.” Fuhrer stated very firmly to the brothers.
Yes sir!" they saluted in unisin.
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Sorry for the typos and the fact that this is kinda boring but i almost started to type in spanish(I am listaning to obsession by aventura). thank you for posting. hope you like chappy 2

Pretty good, but mustang is colonel and he seems a little ooc. I can't wait to see where this goes!

2 good chapters for a first shot. I hope you are updating right now becuase your name is on the veiwing list.

Thank you! you are so nice!

chapter 3 part 1

Winry looked behind her. She ran and ran. the farther away she got, the more she ran. soon, the smoke was so thick she couldnt see. it stung her eyes. it choked her. she kept coughing. she ran bakc to the house but when she turned around, Ed, Al and Pinako stood there.
"You killed me. You did not die. now you will pay." Pinako said in a monotone trance voice.
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NO!" Winry screamed. she jolted up. Ed came barging into her room. she silently sobbed as she huged her knees tightly. ed closed the door behind him and walked over to the bed. he sat down next to her and pulled her onto his lap. he held her like she was his child.
"SShhh. its okay. cry. you can cry all you need too." He rocked her slowly. his auto-mail hand combed through her hair. before he knew it, she was asleep.
he got up and walked to the door.
Good night, winry." he said.


CLIFFY!!! ch3 Part 2 will b up soon!

EdXWinry moment!!! Oh yeah im wondering just to make sure above the ** she is having a dream right?

yes. but not after ed cam into the room. that was real! i love me!

Yay part 1 is up. Wtf is up with Pinako in hte dream she is fucking creepy, you should write horror!

well it was a nightmare. i am not a horror writer. i am in a big mood for romance stories now. i am listening to spanish love song called obsession by aventura!

thay are really good i had a great time readin them hope u post some more

thank you! but my dad needs the comp so i will post more later! I DONT WANT TO LEAVE SO SCREW YOU DAD I AM STAYING ON!!! FREEDOM!!!

Dude dont be mad at your dad you will grounded faster than you can say habadasher.

Was that a joke 0_0

yeah. he had to cook on the grill anyway!

Okay! here is chap 3 part 2!

Winry lay in bed thinking about last night. The sun shined through the window above her bed. she didnt feel well. her stomach was tossing and turning. her head was a stir. she was even burning up. then there was a knock on her door. she didnt say anything. there was another knock. she hoped it wasnt anyone there to yell at her for waking up late and missing breakfast. The knobed turned surprisingly. standing in the doorway was ed. he was shirtless wearing blak cargo pants. he carried a tray with what looked like a toasted bagel and a side of cream cheese.
"Where the hell were you? Breakfast was at 7. it is now 7:47. why the hell are you still in bed?" he was far over a yell.
winry just crawled back under the blanket. Ed set the tray down on her nightstand and sat next to her.
"sorry. Will you please come out so i can talk to you?" He said politly.
winry pushed the covers off of her head. ed put his hand on her forehead.
"Damn. you have to be over 100. you should stay in bed today. i am going to go." Ed said.
"No. dont go. please. i want you to stay here with me." What winry said shocked ed.
"Okay i guess."
They talked for about 20 min until ed said the most shocking thing.
"How do you know when you love someone?"
"I dont know. maybe you look and loo-" eds face was now nose to nose with hers. they both drew in. thier lips touched. they both drew back. looking right into each others eyes. just then, ed pushed winry down. he kissed her passionatly. she did not draw back. just then, they heard a knock on the door. ed quickly got off of winry and jumped into the bath room.
"who is it?"
"Roy."
"Come in." she sat on the edge of her bed.
"Are you okay?"
"Yes im fi-" Roy kissed her straight on the lips. she pushed him off the bed.
"Who the hell do you think you are? you dont just come in here and kiss me! i dont even fucking know you you bastard!" she kicked his stunned bodyand walked into the bathroom.
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all i have to say to my self for this chappy is HELL YEAH!!! i am so cool! stupid roy! i just had to do that though! roy is way hot and way sexy but that bastard is going to play a big part in this story!

Its all happenening so fast, my head is spinning

At first I thought Roy kissed her to get Ed out of the bathroom becuase it is some witty thing he would do to torture Ed. What you wrote *Gets out an English accent to sound like Simion Cowl from American Idol* is not good enough for this competition it moved to fast, the actions of Mustang were out of character, and I think it could have been better.

Sorry if I hurt your feelings but I was being honest.

it was all godd i really like it oh yeah as ur big brother i for one think the F word is way out of ur vocab besides what would ur father say * u know im im jokein*

yeah! i am back. i dont have enough time to write though so if you dont c more posts, SORRY!!! i miss ya! confidential y i am gone! please dont ask! sorry! i will be back!

ciao 4 now;
FullmetalYuna

chap 4!!!

Before Winry got to the door, she felt an arm kllutching tightly around her wrist.
"I will not let Ed have you. I wont!" Roy said.
"let go of me!" Winry struggled.
just then roy shot out of the room. an angry ed stomped out of his hiding place in the bathroom and held his fist up to roy saying that if he did not get out now he would make him into something horrible!
"Ed, ... i... he... he kissed me."
"i know. and he is going to pay."
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okay how you like that? well it aint over! look more!
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Winry walked down the hall to the cafeteria. dinner was being served. she wore a mint green spaghetti strap top and some torn up old jeans that hung loosely off her legs. she had disreguarded the uniform. as she entered the caf, she saw roy and a couple of others at one table across the room. she also saw al at a table with ed reading a book. she walked over and sat next to al.
"What are gonna eat?"Al asked.
"I'm not hungry. i think I'll just have a piece of pizza."
"Take mine. i dont want it. you havnt eaten anything but breakfast so i dont see how you could not be hungry. " Ed said handing his slice of pizzi to winry.
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got to go. will do later!

OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOo............I love it so far!!! IT ROX MY RED AND WHITE STRIPED SOX!!! w00t!

I agree with Chiyo, but head is definetly unable to take this! Keep writing!

Hi.I am SSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO sorry i have not been on this fanfic. i am so busy. i have writers block today!!! i will reply after i get out of the shower. i am getting in now. ciao all!

A bit too much OOC, I think. *nods* same here Saturn Stars and Chiyo, you might want to slow down a bit Fullmetal Yuna, my head can't really take all of it. Anyways, please keep writing, I wonder how Roy's gonna pay.

it was good really good

I think you may want to slow down. But PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE capitalize all the letters at the begging of a new sentence. Can you say OCC (Out Of Character)? I'm with Saturn Stars and Chiyo on this. However you should keep writing. I would hate for you to turn out like a certain user *coughPaigethesoulalchemistcough* Ahem.

Best of luck,
Phyco girl

thanks! i just hope i dont end up giving up on it after the reviews. i have one i am writing here at home that i will post.

Oh, don't give up! Constructive critisism will improve your writing. We enjoy the topic just maybe read over it or have someone else read over it before posting. It's your first story so don't worry about it! Just use that constructive crit. to your advantage and you'll do wonderfully Promise!

-Phyco girl

I agree with Phyco, don't give up. Practise makes perfect after all. Surely it would be worse for everybody to say 'it rocked' and not give you any helpful advise?.

Thanks! I have not been on cause we are on strike against our principle at school. she took away the Talent show! DAMN HER!!!
well i am back i am starting a new and better fic now so tune into it. i cant post now. i have Writers Block!!!! Damnit!

I can't wait for your fic Fullmetal Yuna ^^ !!! And hope you get the Talent Show back !!

Thank you. It is so important to me 'cause I was going to sing this year. Well you said you cant wait so here it is. Just dont blame me if it sucks. I still have Writers Block!

Winry woke up with a sigh. She felt realy happy today. She got up and oppened the drawer on her side table nightstand. There was a small diary in it. She placed it on her lap and oppened it up with the key she found in her pillow case.
Dear diary,
I am sorry for not writing in a while but I have been so busy with the military. You wouldnt be able to imagine how many things need to be fixed here. Just the other day I had 10 guys come in with military vehicles and 15 guys with their watches. I had so much fun. It is really tough work. In my spare time these days I spend time in my room or with Edward and Alphonse. *knock knock** Oh, got to go. I will write more later.

Winry was startled by the knock. She placed the diary and key back in their places, got up and answerd the door. She was surprised to see Maes Hughes in the doorway.

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Heads up people, this is a tribute chapter to Brigidere General Maes Hughes. May he rest in peace.
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"Miss Rockbell. Glad to see you up on a fine morning like this. I have some news to give you. Th Elric (sp?) brothers have been sent out for a while. "
"Well when will they be back?"
"I dont know."

i like it!!! i think its great just keep writing them...and if you dont... well you just dont want to find out what will happen then...

on a site i am on, if i dont write my fanfictions, they use care bears to uh... "persuade"me.

Oooooh, niice!! The Elric brothers (yup, correct spelling) are out of 'town', wonder what'll happen. Take your time Fullmetal Yuna ^^

I don't know what to make of this story besides the all of the OOC going on and how fast you've moved, I also find it a problem that there are a lot of events that don't match with the original FMA story, for instance Pinako was alive throughout the series so this shouldn't even be taking place until after the series' end. Sorry but that's just how I feel, I can be soo mean sometimes.

Its okay. But not to be mean or anything, I dont think there is such a thing as Out Of Charactor. The reason, beacause you can mold charactors into anything you want if fanfictions. Oh, and dont worry. I will try better to go slow. I cant write this week cause
Tommorow: Fort Building and hitting sweet air on my bike on the clay wall(Dunes)
Thursday: Last Concert fo chorus. I am staying at school all day in the bandroom. from 9:00 a.m. to 9 at night 12 hours!!!
Friday, Dad is comming home from work so we are doing family stuff.
Saturday: Same as Friday Lol!!!
Sunday church!!!
Will try to write next week!!!



Note from Quistis: Profanity deleted. Please do not use vulgar language.

winrey actually does join the millitary. I saw a model picture of it on the official website, she was whering a skirt(but not a mini one) see 4 urselves

~chibi eds chibi lover, Dev

Er...There is one scene in the entire anime where Winry does wear the military uniform, but no she does not join the military. The picture on the offical website is showing that one episode.

So far, the plot line for the fanfac is Excellent. (: Though, you might want to make it longer and descriptive so you can spoil us reviewers. XD Keep updating. :'D

OMG!!! I missed you all! My comp had a virus. I lost all of my fan fictions and a really awsome fan art i did. oh well I have to start from scratch now. will later!

Hmmm...I thought Winry does join the military to support Ed and Al? o.O But I can't say for sure because I have only seen the first season. lol.

It's good, but it's moving a little fast. In my opinion, I think you should be a little more descriptive with the scenes and not jump from one scene to another so fast. And the characters seem to be OOC. But other than that, I think it's good for a first fic. Keep writing. (:

I will keep writing but i got to find this fic in the garbage piles of my room first. since i am worried about my comp dying again, i write all my storrieas now. o well. will finish later!