This is the raw pencil version... the lightboxed neat pencil version stilled needs to be colored... somehow. Please, comment, critique, ect.

Very neat!
i can tell u spent long time on it keep it up and
itd look great when its coloured in!

Not bad. Even if it's a sketch, I think you could add some more shading in it. Maybe you did it on purpose, but it kinda lacks depth.
Well, it's that's my opinion, but I'm looking forward to your coloured version
Do your best!