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Haldir of Lorien
post Feb 17 2005, 04:32 PM
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Have you ever made up your own FMA character? If so, post yours here!


I make up my own Characters for anime that i love.
My Fma person, is (this might sound crazy) lust's daughter .
born through alchemy.(sounds creepy?) and in a bizzare cast of events in an alchemic reaction,
he is lust's blood daughter.
Her name(lust's kid made up of course) is Shifter.


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Tobu Ishi
post Feb 17 2005, 06:10 PM
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Meh. I'm careful to the point of paranoia with creating original characters. They turn into Sues far too easily. So far the only original characters, besides the occasional background blender-inner, that I've created for fanfiction have been a skinny, shortsighted Ishbali alchemist-wannabe, and my own personal projections of the Elrics' future children.


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Big Sister to Chiyo, Little Sister to Tokage, Edward to WrenchFreakWinry

An Appetite For Grief Dividing the Bones Elysium FULLMETAL FOLLY
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Rosarium Seven Years The Shadow of Him Some Assembly Required Wired Wooden

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She remembers the way her inexplicably riveted gaze slid unbidden
down the curves of his back, slowly, like honey. And she particularly remembers
the rush of prickly heat, the unfamiliar melting sensation that made her duck
her head to hide a blush that caught her entirely by surprise; as she realized
for the first time, in an entirely new way, that Ed was a
boy.

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post Feb 17 2005, 06:27 PM
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Agreed. Original characters can become Sues (or Stus) waaaay to easily. However everytime I write fanfiction for an anime (usually) I include original characters. So there's nothing wrong with them... you just gotta be very careful with how you use them.


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post Feb 17 2005, 07:40 PM
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Suess? What does that term mean? (I know it is Dr. Suess reference but what does it mean?)

Since no one else will, I will tongue.gif

Name: Sarah
Description: Average Height, jet black hair with blue sheen, glacial green eyes, wears glasses, a few freckels, wears a lil above knee length skirt (beige-brown, neutral color), and a dark grey sweater with the Fuhrer's crest on her left (our right) side of her chest. She is wearing a button down shirt with her collar open. Knee length socks and brown shoes. She has lil longer than shoulder length hair. She is a student of Central High (sorry couldn't come up with better high school name) and is the top of her class (explains school uniform).

She starts becoming interested in Ed when she sees him treveling around town, going in and out of official state buildings. She comes up to him and starts bugging him. He tries blowing her off but she charms her way into staying with him. She takes a look at his metal arm and explains to Ed that the work is shotty O_O She upgrades his arm with a higher grade metal and more durable. She follows on their journey as their mechanic kind of girl and makes Ed stuff that he doesn't seem to care about, but Al has taken a liking to her. He blushes and gets fidgety when she talks to him and Ed sees it. Sarah and Winry kind of passively fight over Ed time to time but Winry usually just takes Ed by the arm and rushes him away. Sarah also understand basics of alchemy and is a math wiz so she can create trans circles and improve others sometimes.

^Sorry if that sounds really cliche (which it does tongue.gif) but Oh well, I never said I was good. biggrin.gif


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Tobu Ishi
post Feb 17 2005, 11:49 PM
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Interesting, but...I can't agree about the "shoddy" automail. Winry's workmanship is spectacular. Ed has shattered other people's automail simply by closing his fist around it and squeezing. Whatever you do or don't believe about their personal relationship, Ed has repeatedly called her the best automail mechanic he's ever known. Her one slip was the time she forgot to install that bolt, but that had nothing to do with workmanship. It was an upkeep mistake, that's all.

The idea that this girl can work automail better than Winry is definitely a Sue trait. I'm sorry, but it is.
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Hmm...if we're outlining our original characters here...
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In the story involving future children, Al and Elysia Hughes have three girls and a fourth baby on the way (Al is hoping shyly for a boy this time). Ed and Winry have one child, Kybright (Ky for short), a boy nearly the same age as Al and Elysia's youngest girl. No names for the girls yet, but I'm debating naming the oldest one Trisha.
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The Ishbali girl is about seventeen or so, a few years older than the Elrics at the time of the fic. She's slightly taller than Ed, thin and round-faced, has dark hair and red eyes (par for the course for Ishbalis), and tends toward the loose, draping clothing typical to her people's women.

Her grandfather was an alchemist who came to Ishbal hoping to spread alchemy and ended up giving it up to marry an Ishbal woman. She loved his stories of alchemy as a child and stole his books when he died, before her mother could find and burn them. Her father and grandparents are dead and she lives with her mother, who is a typical full-blooded Ishbali and hates alchemy. She has no idea that her beloved daughter practices it in secret.

Her dream is to someday win her people's approval for the Great Art, but she is deathly afraid to reveal her secrets. Her talents are uncertain; she is self-taught, undeveloped and certainly not State-level. She sometimes inks simple transmutation circles on her shoulders and arms, but doesn't dare tattoo them permanently, for fear of their discovery. She meets Ed and Al because she pickpockets some vials of red tincture from them on a train, curious and wanting to experiment with the fabled liquid.

...I don't have a name for her yet. Any suggestions?


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The Restoring Earth Alchemist
Big Sister to Chiyo, Little Sister to Tokage, Edward to WrenchFreakWinry

An Appetite For Grief Dividing the Bones Elysium FULLMETAL FOLLY
Good Neighbors Jaybird Letdown Mater Familias Mea Culpa Play With Me
Rosarium Seven Years The Shadow of Him Some Assembly Required Wired Wooden

<3 The EdWin 100 Themes <3
She remembers the way her inexplicably riveted gaze slid unbidden
down the curves of his back, slowly, like honey. And she particularly remembers
the rush of prickly heat, the unfamiliar melting sensation that made her duck
her head to hide a blush that caught her entirely by surprise; as she realized
for the first time, in an entirely new way, that Ed was a
boy.

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post Feb 18 2005, 04:05 AM
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Chiyo lol, just joking. Perhaps something Russian sounding but I'm not sure why.

The only characters that I have made up are most certainly not Sues, one hasn't even been born yet. My Munich man is evil plain and simple. He doesn't do alchemy (mainly as I'm too afraid of writing something wrong) but he's involved within the plot of the other characters (the originals)

I prefer to stick with the 'alter-ego' characters. That way you have your basic character but you can modify to fit in with your story.

As I said Ed and Winrys baby hasn't been born yet so I havn't developed her character. It will be hard to avoid making a Sue...but I will try my best. No name as of the moment, but it'll be something old English (like her father).


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post Feb 18 2005, 04:40 AM
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hm...an interesting topic. i suppose i'll chime in my two cents. *throws pennies*

right now the only story i have with an OC is Shinkume...which...i know, i haven't updated in like a month. i apologize... u__u i've been caught up in the roiais that keep flooding my alleged mind. XD

anyway... i guess i can spill some dirt about ren without giving too much of the story away...

name: Ren
race: Ishbalite
age: 19

description: Ren stands about 5'1" (~155 cm), so...she's really only got a couple inches on Ed... she's stocky, muscular, with legs that could easily kick the crap out of you (and several other people subsequently) and a grip that leaves people wincing when she shakes hands. however, you wouldn't know she's an Ishbalite by the look of her. while she has bronze skin, her eyes are green, and her hair is light streaked with darker brown in no particular pattern. no one in the town she dwells near knows her true roots, and needless to say that the Elrics are pretty shocked when they learn the truth...

personality: ah...Ren has a tendency to give even Edward a run for his money...in particular when the chosen battlefield is armed with insults to be slung. she's fiercely competetive, has a bit of an attitude problem, and is...well...let's just say we wouldn't see her dining with the queen. she's crass and street-tough, as a result of growing up with a father and a younger brother, and no real female role model to emulate. she even talks like a boy (in Japanese vernacular, the speech of men and women differ remarkably) and Edward adores teasing her for this. she's a total tomboy, and she'll give you the worst tongue-lashing of your life if you cross her (and that's if you're lucky and she doesn't just kick your ass), but she's actually not a bad person, if you can believe that. she lost her family in the Ishbal War, and thus chose to change her appearance (via means i cannot divulge for fear of spoiling the fun) and take up life in the town that was erected near the grounds where her village once stood. a bit of a social outcast (probably mainly the fault of her foul mouth and violent tendencies), Ren finds no solace in the company of other people... she does have a cat, though, named Icarus...who Al of course takes an immediate liking to. happy.gif her goals now that she has been integrated into the throngs of Sunaba is to keep sacred the ground upon which her people died...which is turning out to be a far greater chore than she had hoped...

though the Ishbal religion bans the use of alchemy, Ren *is* an alchemist...though she has never really been taught the art. born with transmutation arrays tattooed on her hand (and there is a story to go with this, but i can't tell you here, it's too spoilerific), she had an inherent ability to manipulate elementals, and after the death of her father and brother (and everyone else in her village), she spent her time honing the ability to a fine point; so fine a point, in fact, that she can basically levitate by concentrating on the density of the air around her.

ah, i dare not really say much more for fear of spoiling what lies ahead... heh, once i get some more of Pegasus knocked out, i'll get up the next chapter of Shinkume, i promise!

funny thing, tobu-chan, it seems we think a lot alike. XD our Ishbal girls sound like they'd get along great, don't you think? as for a name...i...really can't say. ah...Ishbal names are sort of...noninclusive, if you know what i mean... in fact, *all* of the names from hagaren have seemed to be from no culture in particular... i tend to think that Ishbalites fit best with unusual or exotic-sounding names... i chose Ren for mine because a.) it was simple, straightforward, and kind of blunt, like the character... and b.) i just like that name... happy.gif;; but your character seems a bit more...ah... well, Ren is just frank and guileless, and your character seems to have a little more stealth and tact to her, so i would have to think that a more flowing, elegant, rolls-off-the-tongue kind of name would suit her better. i'm seeing a...perhaps a variation of Natalie, or something french-sounding...? or if she's a bit of a pickpocket or having delinquent tendencies thus...even only on a playful harmless level...maybe something short and fun that can easily derive a nickname?


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post Feb 18 2005, 07:30 AM
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Shifter is my 2nd fma character. my first is a girl who has a little crush on Al.She has short term memory loss and is a tomboy. She's kinda like winry cause she specialises in mechanical things. cool.gif


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post Feb 18 2005, 07:42 AM
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I made up 2 characters, one is a girl who wants to protect ed because he is a state alchemist, but she is only really good at ealing and maybe a little alchemy.


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post Feb 21 2005, 01:48 AM
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Mary sue-ish characters are those that either end up liking the main characters (ex: Ed, Al, Roy, Riza...etc) or having a relationship with them. Those original characters got labeled like this because in most cases, the original character is the authoress/author herself/himself fantasising to be with the anime/manga character. (and for some more immature writers, they focus on writing fluff between the OC and the main character which makes the story, really boring and a pain to read... so if you see people saying "I HATE MARY SUE-ISH FANFICS" that's what they meant.)

Altho, I have seen some really good fanfics with OC that doesn't start their own love relationship with the anime/manga charactert... just keep in mind that, if you do want to make your OC in love with the anime/manga character, don't put fluff only. You need a good plot line so that the readers won't feel that this is a bad mary sue fanfic.


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post Feb 21 2005, 01:59 AM
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Actually, Mary Sues are any original character that's ridiculously overpowered, overpopular, or overimportant, usually because they are the self-projections of fantasizing authors. rolleyes.gif The male equivalents are Marty Stus or Gary Stus (the terms mean the same thing).

Even canon characters can start to act like Sues/Stus in fics. For example, if Winry suddenly learns alchemy as well as automail, dons a blue trenchcoat that matches Ed's, and kills half the Homonculi because Ed is busy crying helplessly in a corner, she has been viciously Sued.


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The Restoring Earth Alchemist
Big Sister to Chiyo, Little Sister to Tokage, Edward to WrenchFreakWinry

An Appetite For Grief Dividing the Bones Elysium FULLMETAL FOLLY
Good Neighbors Jaybird Letdown Mater Familias Mea Culpa Play With Me
Rosarium Seven Years The Shadow of Him Some Assembly Required Wired Wooden

<3 The EdWin 100 Themes <3
She remembers the way her inexplicably riveted gaze slid unbidden
down the curves of his back, slowly, like honey. And she particularly remembers
the rush of prickly heat, the unfamiliar melting sensation that made her duck
her head to hide a blush that caught her entirely by surprise; as she realized
for the first time, in an entirely new way, that Ed was a
boy.

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post Feb 21 2005, 02:43 AM
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Tobu Ishi: I see. Thanks biggrin.gif I don't write fanfics and seldom read fanfics (because somehow most I pick up are mary sues...) so I wasn't completely accurate on that. Thanks for the correction ^^


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post Feb 21 2005, 04:06 AM
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No problem! I'm always glad to help. <3 I've done this for long enough now that I ought to be of /some/ use to somebody.


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The Restoring Earth Alchemist
Big Sister to Chiyo, Little Sister to Tokage, Edward to WrenchFreakWinry

An Appetite For Grief Dividing the Bones Elysium FULLMETAL FOLLY
Good Neighbors Jaybird Letdown Mater Familias Mea Culpa Play With Me
Rosarium Seven Years The Shadow of Him Some Assembly Required Wired Wooden

<3 The EdWin 100 Themes <3
She remembers the way her inexplicably riveted gaze slid unbidden
down the curves of his back, slowly, like honey. And she particularly remembers
the rush of prickly heat, the unfamiliar melting sensation that made her duck
her head to hide a blush that caught her entirely by surprise; as she realized
for the first time, in an entirely new way, that Ed was a
boy.

Click here to read more...
THEY'RE STILL UPDATING! PLEASE DON'T FORGET THEM. ;_;
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post Feb 21 2005, 04:20 AM
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QUOTE(Tobu Ishi @ Feb 21 2005, 08:59 AM)
Even canon characters can start to act like Sues/Stus in fics.  For example, if Winry suddenly learns alchemy as well as automail, dons a blue trenchcoat that matches Ed's, and kills half the Homonculi because Ed is busy crying helplessly in a corner, she has been viciously Sued.
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Oh darn, that was exactly what my next fic was going to be about tongue.gif (not) Hey my trenchcoat is blue!

The curse of Mary Sue. She attacked me in a Harry Potter fic I wrote. Unfortunatly the idea was for her to seem Mary Sue but that it all went pear shaped. Ah well, can't win 'em all.


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post Mar 5 2005, 12:58 PM
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Yes I have! smile.gif In my fanfiction.Her name is Erin.And one of my friends made one too,the caracters name is Aydan the profit of death alchemist.


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