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Jaybird, "I do not prance! I was taking a bath!"
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Tobu Ishi
post Feb 4 2005, 11:32 PM
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Jaybird
A Full Metal Alchemist Fanfiction
By Tobu Ishi

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There are distinct problems involved in the return of someone you haven’t seen since you were both children.

There are, of course, the obvious ones, such as resentment for having stayed away so long, and anger at the way he’d taken your piece de resistance and gotten it shattered to bits, and the small bitter disappointment of cracking an old private joke only to be met with a blank stare, and realizing that he’s forgotten all about it.

But there are also the more unexpected ones, such as—for example—the matter of privacy. In her own defense, she honestly hadn’t meant anything by it. When last he and his brother had stayed here, there had been bloody stumps to tend, and nerves to tweezer out and staple one by one into a network of fine silver wires, and little opportunity for luxuries like privacy between you and a boy who couldn’t trim his own nails or his hair or pour himself the last of the tea without the teapot lid falling off and spilling the copper-brown liquid all over the bed.

After this unexpected return, she’d half-slipped into the old routine, which included checking up on him to see if he was all right before she went to bed. Unfortunately, he had gotten into new habits during the years of travel, and one of them included a bath before bed, in the quiet moments just before sunset when Al usually went out to watch the colors settle over the horizon, drinking deeply of sight and sound with the last senses he possessed.

Thus it was that Winry slipped through the door into the dimly lit room as quietly as a whisper, in case the room’s occupant was already asleep after his long journey, only to freeze in her tracks as she got a good look around and noticed that Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist, was standing in the middle of the room with his back to her, his golden hair cascading loose and dripping-wet over his shoulders.

And that he was completely, spectacularly naked.

Etiquette doesn’t quite cover situations like this one. Higher brain functions, which might have helped with the question of what to do, were scattered like bowling pins in that first shocked instant. More instinctual urges took advantage of that breach in defenses to send her eyes wandering over curves of warm skin and the smooth shift and pull of muscle beneath. A few rays of sunset light had slipped through the closed curtains, illuminating the softly curved line of his neck, sculpted shoulders and back and-

Short-be-damned, this was not the skinny boy who’d left home years before.

-and a strangled “meep” squeezed its way out of her throat. He flinched and half-turned, and spotted her standing petrified in the doorway. Ed’s yell of surprise and horror finally freed an embarrassed shriek from Winry’s mouth. He dove swiftly for the towel hanging over the back of the chair, nearly knocking his pan of bathwater all over the floor.

The argument that followed, hissed furiously under their breaths and growing steadily in volume as he cinched the towel tightly around his waist, was spectacular enough to rival her welcome earlier that day.

“What the hell are you doing here?!”

“Coming to check on you, idiot, how was I supposed to know you were prancing around naked as a jaybird?!”

“I do not prance! I was taking a bath!”

“In your ROOM?!”

“I’M USED TO BATHING IN MY ROOM!!”

“WELL I’M NOT USED TO NAKED PEOPLE IN MY HOUSE! ESPECIALLY YOU!!”

This was not entirely true. When they were small children, Pinako or Trisha had sometimes bathed them together; but there was a distinct difference between sharing a bathtub with scowling skinny three-year-old Ed with soapsuds in his hair, and sharing one with…with…wow. There went her train of thought.

Outside the door, Al and Pinako waited in the hall for the storm to subside. It ended with a red-faced and huffy Winry slamming the door behind her and stomping away, ignoring grandmother and friend’s startled and amused faces, as a red-faced and huffy Edward slumped onto his bed and ran through his full vocabulary of poisonous epithets under his breath.

The next day, Ed thought to beat the system by going outside to use the shower spigot on the back wall of the house, usually reserved for hosing down equipment and occasionally the dog, while Winry was inside working on automail. He would have done better to stick with Plan A; she remembered that it wasn’t a good idea to barge into Ed’s room now, but had no qualms about taking a brief break from work to play in the yard with Den.

The dog bounded happily across the yard the minute the door opened. The girl got about two steps outside before she looked to see whom her pet was gleefully greeting, and why the boy being greeted was yelling bloody murder at the world in general.

This time the row was earsplitting from the get-go, and accusations of deliberate exhibitionism and voyeurism flew like stones. Only the presence of Den kept Winry from raining tools on the hapless alchemist; only the knowledge that Pinako would kill him kept Ed from clapping his hands to the side of the house and bringing the doorframe down on her head. Ironically, the force with which she slammed the door as she fled the scene nearly did that anyway.

That evening, he had the revolutionary idea of bathing in the actual bathroom. Simply letting her know what he was going to do hadn’t occurred to him yet, and he was half convinced this was all deliberate anyway. Sadly, by now the bathroom was the last place she expected to find him.

On the bright side, Winry could now laugh forever at the mental image of Ed relaxing blissfully in the tub with the wiring of his automail stumps protected under several layers of plastic bags from the local supermarket. He looked, to put it kindly, incredibly dumb. On the not-so-bright side, Ed would now cringe forever at the mental image of opening his eyes to a snickering, staring Winry.

False conclusions and battle lines were quickly drawn, and the confrontation led to both of them grumpily repainting the woodwork in the thoroughly soaked bathroom. Winry complained the whole time about missing several hours of working on his automail. Ed fumed silently, wielding a paintbrush with vicious one-handed gusto.

Fortunately, the near-destruction of her bathroom was enough to convince Pinako to intervene. A brief talk with her granddaughter was enough to decide that the girl wasn’t doing this on purpose. A slightly longer talk with a blushing alchemist told her the rest of the story. When she was done having a good laugh at his expense while he shrank into his chair, she made a few rather sensible suggestions.

By the third day, Winry had taken to waving a hand through doorways before she entered them if she wasn’t sure where Ed was, in case he had taken it into his head to try bathing in the middle of the living room rug. Most of the day was spent holed up safely in the workshop, puttering with finishing touches. Finally, though, the time came, and a smiling Pinako shooed her off to fetch him, to prepare to reattach the automail.

Knocking lightly on his bedroom door, she waited nervously outside.

“C’mon in!”

Well, at least he wasn’t—she stopped and stared as the door swung open. Ed grinned back at her from under dripping bangs. Murphy’s law had struck again; he was halfway through his daily bath, standing in the middle of the floor with the same pan-of-water-on-a-chair setup that had started this mess.

But this time, he was still wearing a pair of light-blue boxers.

“I’ll be done in just a second,” he said, wringing out a flannel over the pan. “Mind waiting?”

“N-not really,” she said, stunned and still staring. And then a giggle slipped out of her, at the absurdity of it all, and his laughter joined hers as she walked into the room and flopped down on the bed, and things were all right again.

There are distinct problems involved in reintegrating someone into your life. There are clashes, and missteps, and adjustments necessary on both sides. But a reminder here, and a few precautions there, and a general dose of compromise can work wonders. And in the end, laughter makes a fine patch as well.

After all, as far as true friendship goes, few things are truly irreparable.


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A/N: This idea came to mind after I was commenting to friends on IM about how odd it is that the only time you see Ed bathing is at the Rockbells’ house. The subjects came up of how he always seems to bathe in his boxers, and how Winry is forever walking in on him, and somehow it was decided that the two phenomena were probably related. And thus this bit of craziness was born. Huzzah. smile.gif


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She remembers the way her inexplicably riveted gaze slid unbidden
down the curves of his back, slowly, like honey. And she particularly remembers
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for the first time, in an entirely new way, that Ed was a
boy.

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post Feb 5 2005, 02:58 AM
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since quotes are apparently not working...i'll have to post in bold... gomen ne... u_u

*applauds* oh, huzzah! tobu-san you rock! this was brilliant! XD i really have nothing to say other than it was absolutely brilliant! you had me laughing out loud, and not many fics have done that. *applauds more* wonderful! fantastic work! i hope we will see more fics from you?

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[quote=Tobu Ishi,Feb 5 2005, 01:32 AM]
And that he was completely, spectacularly naked.[/quote]

*dies laughing* priceless! classic! what a line! *bows* you, my friend, have just made your way onto my favorite author's list. XD

[quote=Tobu Ishi,Feb 5 2005, 01:32 AM]“Coming to check on you, idiot, how was I supposed to know you were prancing around naked as a jaybird?!”

“I do not prance! I was taking a bath!”[/color]

clever! very clever choice of title, very funny mental image. laugh.gif

[quote=Tobu Ishi,Feb 5 2005, 01:32 AM]On the bright side, Winry could now laugh forever at the mental image of Ed relaxing blissfully in the tub with the wiring of his automail stumps protected under several layers of plastic bags from the local supermarket. He looked, to put it kindly, incredibly dumb. On the not-so-bright side, Ed would now cringe forever at the mental image of opening his eyes to a snickering, staring Winry.[/quote]

your writing voice is superb! i LOVE it! you have a lovely way with words, and the way you portray ed and winry is right on the ball. wonderful, wonderful job! the 'incredibly dumb' part? perfect. you've got the character vernaculars down cold!

[quote=Tobu Ishi,Feb 5 2005, 01:32 AM]There are distinct problems involved in reintegrating someone into your life. There are clashes, and missteps, and adjustments necessary on both sides. But a reminder here, and a few precautions there, and a general dose of compromise can work wonders. And in the end, laughter makes a fine patch as well.

After all, as far as true friendship goes, few things are truly irreparable.[/quote]

and what a beautiful closing. what a fabulous story. short, sweet, to the point, not too flowery and plenty of heart. you rule. i am honored to be able to say i was the first to say it here, too. XD i hope you will grace us with more of your genius soon? XD


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post Feb 5 2005, 01:14 PM
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I read this on ff.net .It was awesome! biggrin.gif You da man! [or woman]

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post Feb 6 2005, 01:50 AM
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I was wondering who wrote this. =D And like Tokage, I was laughing just about every body part off while reading. XD


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post Feb 6 2005, 05:05 AM
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Thanks so much for the great comments! Wow, pretty sad when a huge site like ff.net generates less response than a comparatively little forum...that must be why I've always preferred the small sites. happy.gif

And yes, I've posted another fic--"Rosarium". More to come.


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The Restoring Earth Alchemist
Big Sister to Chiyo, Little Sister to Tokage, Edward to WrenchFreakWinry

An Appetite For Grief Dividing the Bones Elysium FULLMETAL FOLLY
Good Neighbors Jaybird Letdown Mater Familias Mea Culpa Play With Me
Rosarium Seven Years The Shadow of Him Some Assembly Required Wired Wooden

<3 The EdWin 100 Themes <3
She remembers the way her inexplicably riveted gaze slid unbidden
down the curves of his back, slowly, like honey. And she particularly remembers
the rush of prickly heat, the unfamiliar melting sensation that made her duck
her head to hide a blush that caught her entirely by surprise; as she realized
for the first time, in an entirely new way, that Ed was a
boy.

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post Feb 6 2005, 05:12 AM
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Wootness... ^^ll nice meh *bows*


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post Feb 6 2005, 02:02 PM
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Oooh! You wrote that? I read it back on ff.net. Did I review? Probably not. dry.gif I'm such a bad girl.

But I loved it. It was hilarious, and sweet, and marvelously written. ::Hugs:: You rock at life.


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post Feb 6 2005, 03:27 PM
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Love your attention to detail. You paint a very vivid image with your writing. A+ cool.gif .
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post Feb 11 2005, 04:01 AM
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*giggles and claps hands* Another fantastically written piece. I love the scenes you have set for the reader, and your attention to detail is precise.


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ooh this is good!! I love the part where she walked into him while bathing!!! so funny!


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Well done! It was very funny! laugh.gif
And the imagination of Ed naked........*nosebleed*
Ok, ok, let's some steam off........okaaaaaaaaaay......
But it sure was well written, so NICE one Tobu Ishi! biggrin.gif
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Hillarious! I loved,
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That evening, he had the revolutionary idea of bathing in the actual bathroom
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