Reta, you definetly show a great command for the English language. I had no problem understanding what you wanted to convey in your story. Although there are some very slight grammar and spelling mistakes, they did not take away from the story as a whole. (I could point them out to you if you like.) The song that you chose for your fiction was both beautiful and poigant, and it works quit well alongside the memories from Ed's past. Perhaps you could expand up Ed's memories and emotions towards the leaving of his father, because they fit so well with the song that you chose. Its a bitter-sweet song-fic overall, and I hope that you continue to write or even expand up this current fiction.